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How not to boil an egg
I would like to say ‘it’s just a phase’, but its not … I am a teenager, and I am totally incapable of boiling an egg without creating some supremely disgusting stink, making a total racket comparable with that of nuclear warfare or smearing boiling water all over my dad’s new cooker. That’s me … an incompetent teenager, good for nothing.
You might say I’m lazy, that I should be able to be independent at my age, and yes, I know, when you were my age, you had a job, you were earning money, baking cakes and sewing buttons onto coats. I’ve heard it all before and I know what you’re thinking: I’m an incompetent teenager, good for nothing.
The other day, I decided to brave an attempt at making myself a lavish breakfast… well, a boiled egg at least. So, I boil the kettle and carefully place my egg into the pan, and go and watch TV.
1 hour later, half way through some horrendously tedious daytime TV, a suspicious smell enters my nostrils and I shiver at the realisation that my egg is likely to be disappointingly blackened. Burnt.
I clumsily stagger to the kitchen on my Saturday-morning legs to be smothered in a fog of fumes and sure enough, the pan has boiled dry, the egg timer melted into a puddle of liquid plastic and my egg has sizzled to nothing more than an unidentifiable lump of I-don’t-know-what.
At this point, you probably want me to explain myself. Ok, I will, I’m an incompetent teenager, good for nothing. Besides, I was bought up by a mother who refused to allow her three year old children to paint, bake or undertake any activity which had the potential to damage her precious carpets. One exception to this rule was that we undertook regular outdoor water fights, however, I must emphasise that this was purely because it meant that we were going to be cleaner when we finished than we would be when we started. It is for this reason that I have had no experience of the more – let me say – adventurous experiences in life and as a result have had no desire to attempt to acquire skills in the cookery department.
I have therefore come to the conclusion that I am better off being an incompetent teenager until it is no longer possible. You may not agree but, I forgive you, after all, you didn’t see the look on my mother’s face when she identified the cause of the rancid stench of a plastic and egg combo that clung to her deep pile carpets.
I think I’ll stick to cereal for my breakfast in future.
Good writing. BUT don’t give the game away in the title. [Starting with Cinderella did get to the ball is no good.] People want to find out how things happen. What about something like “My First Self-Cooked Breakfast” or “How TV Influenced My Cooking”. Then start with your third paragraph and have your calamity as late as possible. Your self-analysis/deprecation can come later and only say things once. I think your Mum should come into the picture earlier. How did the egg in a gooey state get on to the carpet if it was dried to a frizzle? Don’t use a hyphen when you mean a dash.
Thank you Malcolm for your comments. I know from the group that they are interested to see how their work is received by an audience outside of their target audience (that being under 25). As young writers they need lots of encouragement and constructive feedback. With all feedback its up to the writer/author to gauge whether it is valid for them or not. Personally I really liked the way Frances wrote her piece, including the title, it reminded me of my teenage daughter, I instantly could relate to the picture of the egg on the carpet! On a final note – the hyphen/dash mix up is more likely down to my typing skills and the basic software than Frances’ lack of knowledge in knowing the difference. Thank you for pointing it out though.